Authors note: In this story I have brought in some anime characters to make it a little more fun.
I enterd the carnival in Spain. Yes I said in Spain. My name is Francis and this is why I am terrified of carnivals and Spain.
I was new to this place. Only visiting with my "friend" Matthew. I had come here because Matthew dragged me along and I mean literally dragged me. The ferris wheel was the one ride I did not want to go on.Only problem was Matthew wanted to go on it and insisted that I go on it too. I agreed only to regret getting on. As the ferris wheel went around I was screaming. All Matthew did was cover his ears so he couldn't hear me screaming and laughed at me.
When we got off we went to the game area and I decided I wanted to play darts. The only difference with my version of darts was that I wanted to use Matthew as the dart board. Matthew was a lot faster than he seemed. When ever I threw a dart at him he was already in a different spot.
In the end it was not worth it because while Matthew was probably somewhere else I was stuck here.
THE END!!
P.S. I write this from my cell in the prison that I am in. I'll send you a post card some day. I hope you like pictures of blank walls found in Spain!!!!!
I love when you write Arielle- you can always make it any genre you want. This was funny and you should continue with it. I would read it.
ReplyDeleteAh, Francis! They have still not let you out? I will be expecting a post card quite soon! And wasn't that Ferris Wheel ride delightful? See you soon!
ReplyDelete--Matthew <3
Haha, I love this entry Francis, great way of putting Spain and I in there! :D
I noticed a few spelling errors. There is also a few places where commas are needed. Other than that, awesome job. I like the story. c:
ReplyDelete(To Carly- Wow! You used "Spain and I" instead of "Spain and me"! Now only if you would do that while talking to me. Haha )
(To SparklyNinja: ........DANG IT YOUR GETTING TO ME >:C But okay, if you want me to use "I" instead of "me" .....I AND SPARKLYNINJA. :D)
ReplyDeleteI agree, there should be a few more commas, but other than that it's really good. :D
Keep supplying those author's notes so that we can better understand as readers, just what it is you are trying to accomplish with these pieces, and if there is some information that we would find helpful as we read so we don't get lost.
ReplyDeleteThank you. All these tips people give me are only making me a stronger writer.
ReplyDeleteI think I speak for us all when I say, "Glad to help!" Even if I'm not doing much ^^;
ReplyDeletevery funny! I Think even you have done a lot to help me.
ReplyDeleteOh thanks Francis ^^ I mean Franchesca :D
ReplyDelete--Matthew (Mattie) <3